Score = 6
The words “Crime and Punishment” glared at me from
the cover of my new book for English class. As my teacher
announced our new reading assignment, our class released a
simultaneous groan—no one wanted to read Doestoevsky.
Nevertheless, after spending my days delving into this dense
Russian literature, I unexpectedly found Doestoevsky’s
masterpiece to become one of my favorite books. If teachers
exclusively allow students to choose their own reading
material, students education will be impaired and progress
of their reading abilities stagnated. Students need a broad
foundation of literary works and therefore cannot be respon-
sible for determing the content of their education.
To begin, the literature selections of English class
should function, in effect, as a microcosm of the studies of
the school itself. Students are required to complete courses
not just in subjects that interest them, but instead in all areas
of study such as science, social studies, English, and math.
While it is true that permitting students to choose their own
book will allow them to choose books they wish to read, it
is detrimental to students’ education to assume that this
would be beneficial. Were students allowed to choose their
favorite novels or genres, they would perpetually fall back
on what they know, which would leave them utterly unpre-
pared to encounter the works of literature that they will be
asked to read in college, where students don’t have a say in
selecting the materials for their courses. To ensure that stu-
dents are able to persist through literary challenges, there
should be a diversity in the collection of literature students
read, which will not be achieved if a student only reads what
he or she desires.
Furthermore, the abundant rules and regulations present
in schools should serve as a blantent warning. Teens clearly
need to be guided to perform to the best of their abilities.
Even if many teens might benefit from their book selections,
an equal or greater number may not choose challenging lit-
erature. Reading only elementary literature stagnates the
progress of reading skills and would be deleterious to the
quality of students education. It is difficult enough to force
students to complete homework, allowing the student to
choose the difficulty of the homework would not produce
the desired results of learning and progress—the sole reason
students attend school to begin with. In addition, while
some students may select unchallenging books because they
are apathetic or lazy, others may choose certain books
because they do not know what else is out there. It is the
inherent responsibility of the teacher to expose their stu-
dents to all types of material, even unfamiliar works. This
way, other students too, have the opportunity to be pleas-
antly surprised by the intricacies of Doestoevsky. Thank-
fully, my teacher had the ability and wherewithal to provide
me with such new and exciting literature.
Thus, it is vital that students not be given the control
over their education in English class. This would proliferate
undiverse and single-minded teens who would likely not
choose challenging literature. Such a class would be devoid
of enlightening discussion and would not produce the
knowledgable and well-rounded individuals schools should
strive for. A better solution to this problem would be to
allow the class as a group to pick among a selection of
books proposed by the English teacher herself. This would
produce a more democratic medium and stimulate interest,
while avoiding the problems that would result from their
own selections.
Score Point 6
Scoring Explanation
Essays that earn a 6 demonstrate effective skill in
responding to the task. This essay opens with a broad con-
text (
The words “Crime and Punishment” glared at me from
the cover of my new book for English class. As my teacher
announced our new reading assignment, our class released
a simultaneous groan—no one wanted to read Doestoevsky
)
and then critically and persuasively argues that “
students
need a broad foundation of literary works and therefore can-
not be responsible for determing the content of their educa-
tion.
”
The essay demonstrates complexity by responding to a
counterargument to the writer’s position (
While it is true that
permitting students to choose their own book will allow them
to choose books they wish to read, it is detrimental to stu-
dents’ education to assume that this would be beneficial
).
The writer further demonstrates complexity by examining
some of the long-term implications of allowing students to
select their own novels (
Were students allowed to choose
their favorite novels or genres, they would perpetually fall
back on what they know, which would leave them utterly
unprepared to encounter the works of literature that they will
be asked to read in college, where students don’t have a say
in selecting the materials for their courses
).
Development of ideas is ample, specific, and logical.
The writer elaborates on general statements (
Teens clearly
need to be guided to perform to the best of their abilities
) by
supporting such statements with more specific reasons and
examples (
Even if many teens might benefit from their book
selections, an equal or greater number may not choose
challenging literature. Reading only elementary literature
stagnates the progress of reading skills and would be delete-
rious to the quality of students education. It is difficult
enough to force students to complete homework, allowing
the student to choose the difficulty of the homework would
not produce the desired results of learning and progress—
the sole reason students attend school to begin with
).
The organization of the essay is clear and grows from
the writer’s purpose instead of being predictable. Ideas are
logically sequenced, and transitions are used to show the
connection between ideas (
To begin..., Furthermore..., In
addition..., Thus...
). The introduction and conclusion are
effective, clear, and well developed. The introduction pro-
vides a narrative to establish context for the discussion, and
the conclusion goes beyond merely summarizing the essay’s
main points into a discussion of additional implications of the
prompt’s proposal (
This would proliferate undiverse and
single-minded teens who would likely not choose challeng-
ing literature. Such a class would be devoid of enlightening
discussion and would not produce the knowledgable and
well-rounded individuals schools should strive for
).
The essay shows a good command of language. Sen-
tences are varied and word choice is varied and precise
(
delving, microcosm, deleterious, apathetic
). Although there
are a few minor errors present in the essay (for example, a
comma splice and an occasional missing apostrophe), they
do not distract the reader.
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